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 [[!img self_small.jpg alt="Am I up to this?" link=131124a]]
 
-I've signed myself up for a talk and conducting two discussions
+I've signed myself up for a talk and for conducting two discussions
 at the [MiniDebconf-Women](https://wiki.debian.org/DebianWomen/Projects/MiniDebconf-Women/2014)
 coming up in March. They will be my first small contributions
-to the Debian community. And my first public talk at all.
+to the Debian community. And my first public talk ever.
 
 [[Read more|131124a_en]]
 
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 [[!img self.jpg alt="Am I up to this?" size=600x link=self]]
 
-I've signed myself up for a talk and conducting two discussions
+I've signed myself up for a talk and for conducting two discussions
 at the [MiniDebconf-Women](https://wiki.debian.org/DebianWomen/Projects/MiniDebconf-Women/2014)
 coming up in March. They will be my first small contributions
-to the Debian community. And my first public talk at all.
+to the Debian community. And my first public talk ever.
 
 The talk is called "Graphic Design with Debian". I've made an
 initial presentation of what it's about [[right here|talks/graphicswithdebian]].
@@ -34,17 +34,17 @@ dialogue. I want cooperation. I want further understanding -
 both ways. I want us to level with each other.
 
 This is not easy. I live and work with a geek, and God knows
-we don't always speak the same language. I've also seen a
-snub-nosed designer being boo'ed out of a presentation. I
-won't let that happen to me. I have no design presentation. I
-have no ideas up front. I'd like to invite coders into my
+we don't always speak the same language. I've also previously
+seen a snub-nosed designer being boo'ed out of a presentation.
+I won't let that happen to me. I have no design presentation.
+I have no ideas up front. I'd like to invite coders into my
 world. I want to introduce coders to design thinking. I know
 it is possible, and if anyone can do it, I can. At least I
-hope.
+hope so.
 
-I have some cleaning up to do in my world to make my points
-understandable. I'm glad there is a whole winter to do that.
-I'll keep you posted.
+I have some cleaning up and other preparations to do in my
+world before the party begins. I'm glad I have a whole long
+winter to do that. I'll keep you posted.
 
 """]]